Tuesday, 8 November 2011

Poetry Assignment, Concrete Poem, War Service

Pride,
Respect,
Honor,
 Loyalty,
Patriotism,
Passion,  
Commitment,
Wholeness.
We serve to save our young from this hell on earth that we call war.      
We serve to bring great amounts of honor, respect, and pride to our families.
We serve for our country and the physically unable who cannot fight back. 
When we die we do the opposite of all the things we want to achieve. 
When we die we feel remorse, guilt, fear, and torture,
knowing we will never be coming home to our deserving families
Guilt, 
Remorse,
Apologetic,
 Heartbroken,
Torture,
Concern,
Uncertainty,
Fear, 
Pain, 
Difficulty,
Hardship,                                         
Struggle, 
Shame, 
Grief,
Dishonored.   

2 comments:

  1. I don't know why the word hardship won't stay in place but i think you get the idea of what I was going for.

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  2. It's a good idea and you've got some nice word choices to fit into the structure. There's no big sense of sacrifice of your meaning in the overall.

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